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标题: 申请耶鲁的Essay范文欣赏下面的这篇作文是一篇极为优秀的范文，作者为 Lanren A Hackney，被耶鲁大学，麻省理工学院和波士顿学院同时录取。原文：
I'M GOING RUNNING TODAY. I am not concerned about my calorie consumption for the day, nor am I anxious to get in shape for the winter season. I just want to go running。
I used to dislike running. &If you don't win this game, you're all running five miles tomorrow,& the field hockey coach used to warn, during those last days of October when the average temperature seemed to be decreasing exponentially. And so, occasionally, my grief-stricken team would run numerous miserable laps around the fields. At the end of these excursions, our faces and limbs would be numb, and we would all have developed those notorious flu- but the running made us better in the long run, I suppose. Nevertheless, I counted down the days until the end of the field hockey season, vowing never to put on a pair of running shoes again. Then I surprised myself by signing up for outdoor track in the second half of sophomore year. I was foolish to have believed that I could ever escape this insidious and magnetic addiction。
Anyone would have thought that I'd be off the team in a few days, but the last week of January caught me splashing through puddles of melted ice, and February winds nearly blew me off the track. I looked forward to practices this time around, to the claps and the persistent cheers of my fellow trackies. I was feeling a &runner's high& spurred by the endorphins released by exercise. But to attribute my affinity for running solely to chemistry diminishes the personal importance that running has for me。
I like running—in the cool shade of the towering oak trees, and in the warm sunlight spilling over the horizon, and in the drops of rain falling gently from the clouds. Certain things become clear to me when I'm running—only while running did I realize that &hippopotami& is possibly the funniest word in the English language, and only while running did I realize that the travel section of The York Times does not necessarily provide an accurate depiction of the entire world. Running lends me precious moments to contemplate my life: while running I find time to dream about changing the world, to think about recent death of a classmate, or to wonder about the secret to college admission
Running is the awareness of hurdles between me running is the desire to overcome them. Running is putting up with aches and pains, relishing the knowledge that, in the end, I will have built strength and endurance. Running is the instant clarity of vision with which I can see my future just one hundred y it is the understanding that these crucial steps will determine victory or defeat。
Running is not the most important thing in the world to me, but it is what fulfills me when time permits. And right now, before the sun goes down, I like to take advantage of the road that lies ahead。
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&今天我要去跑步。我不是担心一天的卡路里消耗，我也不是渴望在冬季保持自己的身材。我只是想去跑步。
我过去并不喜欢跑步。“如果你们没有赢得这场比赛，明天你们所有人都得跑5英里。”曲棍球教练过去常常警告；那是十月的最后几天，平均气温仿佛呈指数般骤降。是的，偶尔，我们可怜的球队队员会在田径场上痛苦地跑上很多圈。在长跑结束的时候，我们的脸和四肢会变得麻木，我们都会出现类似臭名昭著的流感一样的症状；我猜想，就长远而言长跑对我们有利。尽管如此，我都会数着距离曲棍球赛季结束还剩几天，并发誓绝不再穿上跑鞋。然后，连我自己也感到惊奇，十年级下学期的时候，我又报名参加了室外径赛队。我傻乎乎地以为我本可摆脱这种渐渐积累且磁性般的跑步瘾。
任何人都以为我会在几天内脱离径赛队，但一月的最后一个星期，我跑过冰雪消融后的水坑，水花飞溅；二月的风里，我几乎被吹离跑道。我期待在这个时节训炼，以回应同伴队友的鼓励和不断的喝彩。我感受到因锻炼释放的内啡肽刺激产生的跑步者的快感。但是，仅仅把我对跑步的爱好归结于化学反应是降低了跑步对我个人的重要性。
我喜欢跑步－在高耸橡树阴凉的树荫里，在从地平线溢漫出的温暖阳光里，在从云彩中落下的雨滴里。当我跑步时，有些事情对我会变得清晰。只有当我跑步时，我才意识到，河马可能是英语里最搞笑的单词；只有当我跑步时，我才意识到《纽约时报》的旅游版并不一定提供了对整个世界的准确描绘。跑步给了我思考我的人生的宝贵时刻：跑步时，我有时间去梦想改变世界，去思考最近去世的同学，或去猜想大学招生的秘密。
跑步是对我和终点之间的障碍的意识;跑步是克服这些障碍的愿望。跑步是忍受疼痛，品味这样的认知：最终，我会建立起力量和耐力。跑步是瞬间视野的清晰，使我看到我的未来只在百码以外；跑步是一种理解：剩余的关键步子将决定成败。
跑步对我并不是世界上最重要的事，但它却在时间容许下让我充实满足。现在，日落之前，我想利用前方的道路，再跑上一回。
作者: 文化大革命& & 时间:
这篇作文的题目是关于课外体育活动。利用跑步锻炼这个题材，作者阐述了自己对人生现实的认知，充满了积极向上的期待。
要完全理解这篇作文，有必要提到据说是比尔·盖茨送给年轻人的十一条忠告：
1. 生活是不公平的，你要去学会适应它；
2. 这世界不会在意你的自尊，这世界指望你在自我感觉良好之前先要有所成就；
3. 高中刚毕业后你不会一下就拿到年薪六万美金的职位，你也不会很快成为拥有车载电话的公司副总，这些都要你自己挣得；
4. 如果你认为你的老师严厉，等你有了老板后再比较，老板可不是终身的；
5. 翻烤汉堡包并不有损你的尊严。你的长辈们用另一个词来描述这份工作，他们称之为机遇；
6. 如果你搞砸了，那不是你父母的错，不要只会发牢骚，要学会吸取教训；
7. 在你出生之前，你的父母并非像现在这样乏味。他们变成今天这个样子是因为这些年来他们一直在为你付账单，给你洗衣服，听你大谈你是如何的酷。在你大谈拯救雨林以免遭受你父母辈的寄生虫的危害时，先把你自己衣橱里的跳蚤除去；
8. 你的学校也许已经不再分优等生和劣等生，但生活却仍在划分；有些学校已经废除了不及格并给你想要多少就多少的机会让你得到正确的答案。但在现实生活中，却完全不同；
9. 生活不分学期，你并没有暑假可以休息，也没有几个人乐于帮你发现自我。你得用你自己的时间去发现；
10. 电视并不是真实的生活，在现实生活中，人们得离开咖啡屋去干自己的工作；
11. 善待那些看似怪异的人，很有可能有一天你会不得不为他们打工。
美国的大学教育是普通教育，培养有一技之长、对社会有用并且能适应社会的人。现实社会，不可避免会有很多不公平的地方，要成功，需要有顽强的心理素质。名牌大学对学生未来的发展期望很高，对学生承受压力、正视挫折的能力非常看重。很多大学的命题作文直接或间接地考察学生面对人生逆境的表现；而一个聪明的学生也会利用机会展示自己面对挑战的勇气和进取心。
在这篇作文里，作者开始就提到了自己早年在曲棍球队的经历：一个粗暴有虐待倾向的教练和惩罚性的长跑。尽管心里很不乐意，作者并没有放弃，反而以一种适应的态度去对待并最终迷上了这项运动。径赛队同伴的鼓励，让我们看到了作者珍惜友爱和社会的温情；作者的感悟，让我们既看到了作者走向社会的心理准备，又充满了积极的人生向往。一般的作文要求500单词左右，这篇文章共503单词，在有限的空间，包含了磨难，毅力，关怀，理解，憧憬。全文词汇优雅丰富，修辞巧妙，用了很多排比句，画面感非常强，感染力也非常强。在具体写作技巧上，有二点值得一提：
1. 使用了不少科学词汇，如指数般(exponentially)，内啡肽(endorphin)，爱好(affinity)，这些词汇的应用显然有利于叩击麻省理工学院的大门。
2. 巧妙甚至狡猾地使用了幽默。幽默是个双刃剑，往往容易弄巧成拙，一般人在作文里会尽量避免。然而，作者却大胆地调侃道：跑步时，会去猜想大学招生的秘密 --这简直是在向正在阅读此作文的招生人员叫阵！但是，说这句话的时候，招生的人应该已经为其经历和毅力所触动，而且前面谈到河马单词，已经把作文的节奏调得轻松，这句话会让招生人员会心一笑，拉近了彼此的距离。而随后梦幻般的紧凑道白，为这篇作文留下了非常美妙的收尾。
Lauren 是个可男可女的名字，但从第一段谈论控制体重保持身材就可看出是个女孩。的确，这篇文章透着一股女孩气，精灵机警，如同金庸小说里的某位人物。（转载）
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再看一篇中国学生申请美国大学的《自传》
我叫XX，今年17岁，在北京XX中学念高中。
小学一年级时，我在北京朝阳区XX小学就读。由于父母的工作原因,二年级我转到了XX小学。这两年并没有体会到太多的东西，只知道玩、闹、疯。在我居住的院里，有不少属“马”的同龄人，被大人们称为一群“疯马”！但在玩、闹、疯中，我感受到了友谊和团队精神，明白了如何与人相处。如今这些“马”虽然各奔一方，但我们的友谊依然如故。
小学三年级时，也是因父母工作的原因，我在日本东京生活了一年，在那里的“上高田小学”读书。刚到学校时，由于语言不通无法与同学交流，闹了很多笑话。有一次,一位同学问我一句话,我听不懂,就回答说：“NO!”后来才知他是问我“你喜欢你爸爸吗?”这样的例子很多，我感到十分痛苦!但老师与同学们对我非常热情和关照，我也想尽快闯过语言关，和大家成为好朋友。我的老师让一个名叫伊窦的同学专门帮助我。记得那时，我从他们那里学到的第一个词就是“加油”。我把每天学到的新词汇写在本子上，放学回家就下功夫背，不把它们记熟，我是不会睡觉的。经过我不懈的努力和老师同学对我的帮助，在很短的时间里，我不仅能和他们正常交流，交了更多的朋友，而且，我还参加了班里“警察与小偷”的短剧演出，在里面扮演“小偷”的角色。
在“上高田小学”读书，是我少年的一段难忘时光。其中给我留下印象最深的是一次打输了的篮球比赛。
那是班里举办的一次篮球比赛。一共分为6队，每队5个人，由队长自由挑选球员，而我则成为了其中一个队的队长。我和我的4个好朋友一路过关斩将到了最后的决赛，对手十分强大，但我们十分自信，互相鼓励。比赛开始后却不像想象的那样，我们被打得喘不过气来。虽然我们一直坚持着，但最终还是输掉了比赛。赛后我反省了一下，觉得输了比赛完全是因为我不信任队友，过多的依靠自己，但五个队友没有一个人抱怨我，他们说朋友即使做错了事也应该互相理解。这个理念从那时起，就深深埋在了我的心里。
小学毕业的那个暑假，我到英国参加了为期四周的夏令营，当时我的英语不像当年去日本时的日语那么差，我小学毕业考试英语得98分，到英国后，与“洋妈妈”和英国朋友的勾通还是不成问题的。遗憾的是我太小，还不到13岁，除了玩，没有更多的东西留在记忆里。
初中三年，我在北京“XX学校”读书。由于学校离家太远，我从初一就开始住校了。也许在别的同龄人眼里这不见得是什么好事，但我却十分渴望这样，在家里被父母管束惯了，这种所谓的自由让我很开心。我在住校的过程中开始自己管理自己，遵守作息时间，讲究个人卫生，按时完成作业，这也算做独立生活的开始吧！似乎那所学校的学生都很有钱，让人感觉每个人都很傲慢，同学、宿友们常常发生“磨擦”，我也面临过这种“磨擦”。在一次游戏中，由于一点小事，我的一个宿友就和我发生了争执，最后弄得大家都很不愉快，好几天都互不理睬。后来我也不断的反思，征求其他朋友对此事的看法。这个时候，我又想起“上高田小学”同学对我说过的话：朋友即使做错了事儿也应该互相理解。我便主动找他说话，我们也因此重归于好，之后再也没有出现过任何矛盾。在“XX学校”我与很多同学都是非常要好的朋友，这也多亏了在日本的“磨炼”！
初三将面对中考，学习的压力逐渐大了起来，当时我在班里排第15名左右，这个成绩想上重点高中是不可能的，而我平时除了英语和语文不错，物理化学是绝对的弱势，我认为这两科主要是因为平时的基础没有打好，做题太少导致成绩太差。于是，我开始从这方面下手。我针对课本上的概念和练习册上的题目刻苦自学。刚开始学的效果不是很好，同样的一道题变个方法我就不会了，我的信心开始动摇，又把学习不当回事了。在之后的考试中，我非但没有进步，反而跌出了前20名。我的老师似乎发觉了这一点，找我谈话，告诉我不能因为受到一点挫折就放弃，成功对于永不懈怠的人是里程碑，对于骄傲自满的人是沉重的包袱，对于不求进取的人是祸害——这些道理深深打动了我！从那以后，我决心在中考前一定要尽自己最大的努力去冲刺理想的学校，争取成功。在半年后的中考中，我终于以高出录取线50分的成绩考上了我想上的高中，我也更加理解了老师那番话的深刻含义。
上高中后，由于我的学习成绩突出，老师让我当了班长，我也非常珍惜这次机会，决定好好表现，不辜负老师的期望。同学不会的题我都乐于帮助，老师不在的时候我都能维持好班里的纪律。不仅老师们对我的表现十分满意，同学们也觉得我当班长最合适了。
到了第二个学期，我们班即将重新竞选班长，由同学们投票完成。在这之前我的好朋友XX不经意间说他特想当班长，从来没当过，特别羡慕我。我一直把这件事记在心中，于是，我就提前跟我的所有好朋友说把票投给XX，给他一个当班长的机会。可令我意外的是全班40名同学，最终我得到了23票，我十分感动，觉得一个学期的班长没有白当，至少得到了同学们的认可。在复选中，得票前三位的人要上台发言，再进行一次投票。我在发言中说：“感谢大家对我的支持，我很高兴大家如此信任我，可是我很希望把这个机会留给其他人，让更多的同学在班长的岗位上得到锻炼，所以我弃权。”于是XX顺利当上了班长，我为他感到高兴！同时也感到：得到大家的信任是多么幸福的一件事儿！
同学们对我的信任不仅体现在竞选班长，还体现在篮球场上。我从小喜欢打篮球，征战多年，现在我已是篮球场上的“领军人物”。上高二时，我们学校组织和“佳得乐”公司进行了一次体育比赛活动，全校各年级都可以参加，我和我的朋友们报名了“3V3”的篮球赛。意外的是如此“重量级”的比赛我依然是队长。第一场比赛我和另外两名同学一起赢了对方21分，我们十分高兴，成功晋级了32强。不过与在日本读小学时那场输了的比赛不同的是，作为后卫的我，更多的不是得分，而是助攻伙伴得了不少分，这令我十分欣慰。在接下来的几场比赛中，我们在场上努力拼搏，挥洒汗水，团结默契，一路进军到决赛。决赛的对手是校篮球队组成的队员，十分强大。看到我的队友畏惧的神情，虽然我也同样紧张，但我开始为他们打气。我简要地说了战术，并分析了对手的弱点，终于重新唤醒他们的自信。比赛开始后，双方可以说是势均力敌，他们也许更强在技术，而我们的拼搏意识和团队精神比他们坚硬。最后一分钟，我们战成41比40，我们落后一分，紧接着我们通过配合将比分反超成42比41。于是压力就转到了他们身上，他们的队长同样是个后卫，这时离比赛结束只剩12秒，只要防守成功，我们就是第一了。也许由于太紧张，对手的一个假动作令我分神，让他轻松的突破了进去。这一刻,时间仿佛静止了，四周的呐喊声似乎也听不到了，眼看着他跳在空中将要进行上篮动作，我的大脑一片空白，仿佛又回到了在日本时的那次失利。可正当我绝望之时，一只大手盖住了球的行进路程，直接把它扇飞了，原来是我的队员帮我补防了，随着球的落地，比赛结束的哨音也吹响了，我们居然赢得了比赛，获得了第一名！我们队所有的人都沉浸在喜悦中不能自已......。
高二的署假，我到美国去参加了为期两周的夏令营活动。与以前去日本一年、去英国四周相比，这次是时间最短、却是印象最深的一次！我们住在美国的XXX 。参观了XXX，去 XXX 学校上语言课等等。在我感慨美国科技之发达，城市之美丽的同时，我更赞叹美国公众的素质之高，美国环境的保护之好，人们是那样的彬彬有礼，蓝天白云是那样的透彻明亮，让人感到无比愉悦。& && && && && &&&
我们这一代青少年大都非常喜欢电子竞技游戏，我也不例外。很小就开始玩电子竞技游戏，从简单到复杂，我最喜欢玩的是“魔兽争霸”和“魔兽世界”。当然，玩这些游戏是绝对不能影响功课的。我倒觉得从这些电子竞技游戏中，我体验到了很多对我成长有意义的东西。比如“魔兽争霸”，我认为是一种最大限度发挥个人思维、技术、能力从而取胜的竞技游戏；而“魔兽世界”，是一种最大限度发挥团队配合、组织协调、以强大的团队精神取胜的竞技游戏。这两个游戏既让我其乐无穷，也让我对个人力量与团队精神谁轻谁重有了更加清晰的认识和更加准确的把握。
小时候，我还练过几年钢琴，当然不是为了长大当音乐家，而是陶冶情操。还有一个目的：父母说我太淘气，很难安静下来，学学钢琴，练练我的“静功”。我非常感谢我的父母，让我进入音乐这个美丽而快乐的世界，那些大师们的乐章我记忆犹新。直到现在我仍然喜欢欣赏高雅音乐，喜欢看话剧，常常被一些文艺作品中的感人情节所感动，甚至流泪。
小学，初中，高中，三个不同的时期，三个不同的我，我学到了更多的知识，懂得了更多的道理，我逐渐走向成熟。金无赤足，人无完人，我还要不断完善自己。
我目前最大的愿望是高考能考上一所重点大学，或者是有可能去美国上大学。我现在为这个目标而努力着，我相信梦想终究会实现，加油吧！
作者: 文化大革命& & 时间:
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欣赏三：My childhood left three months ago on a plane to Austria.
It was a sad day, the end of June, when my baby cousins moved away. They had lived nearby for almost five years, and now they were moving to a country too far to visit with any regularity. My cousins were a fundame when they were not with me, they were on my mind. A week had never gone by without a visit from them and I doubted my life would be the same without them. They brought back the untroubled days of my childhood, through games, adventures, and yet they helped mature me from an at-times selfish teenager into a responsible, mature adult.
My aunt and uncle moved to New Jersey from Boston, with their 1-year-old daughter Yasmeen, in the winter of 1998. They lived in an apartment on the side of our house and I was ecstatic to have our family, especially a baby girl, so close to us. Yasmeen had close friendships with each of my sisters, but I knew the one that developed between us was the strongest. As she began to walk on her own and talk in full sentences, I realized the extent of my influence upon her. I would notice her syntax and mannerisms mimicking mine. I also noticed when she’d copy some of my more unpleasant actions, arguing with her mother after I had done the same. Yasmeen made me realize what being a role model really was.
When Maya was born in 2000, Yasmeen had a hard time adjusting. She was jealous of the attention we all paid to her new younger sister, so I did my best to pay attention to her when she might have not been noticed. Once Yasmeen overcame her jealousy, she was able to enjoy Maya’s presence in our lives, like we all did. Maya grew up fast, too, it seemed. Each day, they got a little bit bigger, doing my best to free my schedule for my two favorite people.
My experience with Yasmeen and Maya has brought me to realize the importance of influential people. I know that I have helped Yasmeen and Maya grow, but “the babies” have made an even great impact on my own life. They have shown me how to be a parent, a sister, a cousin, a babysitter, a child, and most importantly, a friend. My relationship with my cousins has made me a better person-a more patient person, with the ability to tolerate endless questio an exuberant person, able to have fun and be happy with others and sometimes, when I’d rather not, fo a role model, showing the babies the ethics of life, right, wrong, and a compassionate person, able to be responsible, forgiving, and loving. Yasmeen and Maya made me know that I can and do affect people’s lives and emotions. They are where I leave a lasting impression. And maybe, as they grow, they won’t remember all the fun times we had, but I do know they’ll remember the things I tried to teach them about life and love and family.
Things to Notice about This Essay英文点评
1.&&The essay has a sharp, strong beginning and a fresh honesty that conveys the events of the author’s life and her outlook.
2.&&The style is simple and the topic is, too. But we believe in this story because of its simplicity.
3.&&The author proves that this has been a significant experience by the lessons she enumerates in the last paragraph.
4.&&The reader needs to know a little more about the circumstances of these moves from Boston to New Jersey to Austria, in order to understand the context of the essay.
5.&&A few more specific examples in the second and third paragraphs would give them the same strength and vividness as the “spilled juice” reference.
6.&&Having shared this interesting story, the author might find a few more insights and results to add to the last paragraph.&&The e the effects might be multiplied.
中文点评：
1、&&这是一篇带有感情描写的申请Essay，属于三种最厉害的Style（Professional, Appealing to Emotion, and Creative）中的第二种。
2、&&本文写作文风轻快，但流露真情实感，很容易让读者有触动。
3、&&文章表面写分离之痛和表亲之谊，却带出了自己的成长感触和对世界的理解（主要体现在最后一段），不是没有任何point的感情描写。
4、&&开头段很强（语不惊人死不休）。
作者: 文化大革命& & 时间:
欣赏四：My most important experience sought me out. I I didn’t cause it.
My preferred companions are books or music or pen and paper. I have only a small circle of close friends, few of whom get along together. They could easily be counted “misfits.” To be plain, I found it quite easy to doubt my ability to have any sort of “close relationship.”
After the closing festivities of Andover Summer School this past summer, on the night before we were scheduled to leave, a girl I had met during the program’s course approached me. She came to my room and sat down on my bed and announced that she was debating with herself whether she wanted me to become her boyfriend. She wanted my reaction, my opinion.
I was startled, to say the least, and frightened. I instantly said, “No.” I told her I on no account wanted this and that I would reject any gestures she made towards starting a relationship. I would ignore her entirely, if need be. I explained that I was a coward. I wanted nothing whatsoever to do with a relationship. I talked a lot and very fast.
To my surprise, she did not leave instantly. Instead, she hugged her knees and rocked back and forth on my bed. I watched her from across the room. She rocked, and I watched. Doubts crept up on me. Opportunity had knocked and the door was still locked. It might soon depart.
“I lied,” I said. “I was afraid of what might happen if we became involved. But it’s better to take the chance than to be afraid.”
She told me she knew I had lied. I had made her realize, though, how much she actually wanted me to be her boyfriend. We decided to keep up a relationship after Andover.
Even then, I was not sure which had been the lie. Now I think that everything I said may have been true when I said it. But I’m still not sure.
I learned, that night, that I could be close to someone. I also realize, now, that it doesn’t matter whether or not tha the only important thing is the feeling, the closeness, the connection. As long as there is something between two people--friendship, love, shared interests, whatever else--it is a sign that there can be some reconciliation with fear, some “fit” for misfits. And it shows that fear need not
always win, that we can grow and change, and even have second chances.
I am still seeing her.
Things to Notice about This Essay相关点评
1. It follows the standard essay pattern: an introduction (short), a series of supporting paragraphs for the body, and a conclusion (here, a summary paragraph and an end sentence).
2. It has a focus: his anxiety about relationships.
3. It has proof: the story of his conversation with a girl. Again, focused narrative development has made the proof vivid.
4. It is short, to the point, simple, and yet memorable. It is interesting without being grand, noble, or cosmic.
5. The style is simple and direct, employing short sentences and simple words to tell a simple story.
6. It coordinates and enriches an application full of academic achievements and high scores and grades. It is information definitely not found elsewhere in the application.
作者: 文化大革命& & 时间:
欣赏五：Undergraduate College Application Essay Sample
From the time I was able to realize what a university was, all I heard from my mother’s side of the family was about the University of Michigan and the great heritage it has. Many a Saturday afternoon my grandfather would devote to me, by sitting me down in front of the television and reminiscing about the University of Michigan while halftime occurred during a Michigan Wolverines football game. Later, as I grew older and universities took on greater meaning, my mother and uncle, both alumni of the University of Michigan took me to see their old stomping grounds. From first sight, the university looked frightening because of its size, but with such a large school comes diversity of people and of academic and non-academic events.
In Springfield High School, non-academic clubs such as the Future Physicians and the Pylon, both of which I have belonged to for two years, give me an opportunity to see both the business world and the medical world. These two clubs have given me a greater sense of what these careers may be like. In Future Physicians, I participated in field trips to children’s hospitals and also participated in two blood banks.
Currently I hold a job at Maas Brothers. This lets me interact with people outside my own immediate environment. I meet different kinds of people, in different moods, with different attitudes, and with different values. This teaches me to be patient with people, to have responsibility, and to appreciate people for what they are.
In the community I am active in my church Youth Group. As a high school sophomore, I was our church’s representative to the Diocesan Youth Fellowship. I helped organize youth group events, the largest being “The Bishop’s Ball”, a state-wide event for 300 young people. I also played high school junior varsity soccer for two years. As a senior I will be playing varsity soccer, but in the off-season. As a junior I coached a girls’ soccer team for the town. This gave me a great deal of responsibility, because the care of twenty-four girls was put into my custody. It felt very satisfying to pass on the knowledge of soccer to another generation. The girls played teams from other parts of Florida. Though their record was 3-8, the girls enjoyed their season. This is what I taught them was the greatest joy of soccer.
The past three years of my life have given me greater visions of my future. I see the University of Michigan as holding a large book with many unread chapters and myself as an eager child who has just learned to read. I intend to read a probe into all the chapters. The University of Michigan offers me more than the great reputation of this fine school, but a large student body with diverse likes and dislikes, and many activities, both academic and non-academic, to participate in. With the help of the University of Michigan, I will be successful after college and be able to make a name and place for myself in our society.
Things to Notice about This Essay中文点评
1.&&It follows a general essay organization, with an introduction, several body paragraphs about different activities, and a conclusion that returns to the earlier idea of Michigan’s diversity.
2.&&It has no focus but rather jumps around from the school to the writer and from point to point.Notice especially the lack of transition from the first paragraph to the second:&&how did we get from Michigan’s diversity to the writer’s clubs?
3.&&The body paragraphs lack proof:&&What are these clubs and jobs, what did he do in each one, how many field trips were taken, and what was his role?
4.&&What’s Pylon?&&What does he do at Maas Brothers?
5.&&There are plenty of generalizations but no evidence to back up any of them.&&How did these activities give him a greater sense of the career world?&&“Participated” and “interact” are pretty vague words.&&Compare the discussion of Maas Brothers with the hockey ref’s story
6.&&There is very little specific knowledge of what the University of Michigan has to offer.
7.&&The style is rather stuffy and awkward (“while halftime occurred”, “the care of twenty-four girls was put into my custody”).
8.&&Most important, nearly everything described here appears elsewhere on&&the application, under sports, jobs, extracurricular activities, and alumni connections.
9.&&The writer would be well advised to focus on one of the things discussed in this essay.&&Perhaps he could show the reader his work with the girls’ soccer team.&&What he did to make Jennifer and Gretchen and Courtney enjoy soccer even though they only won three of their games would be more vivid than a lot of talk about passing things on to future generations.
10.&&In short, the essay seems full of information and displays adequate form, but it lacks focus and proof.
作者: 安多福& & 时间:
谢谢楼主,原来这就是Essay了{:1_1:}
中文的Essay其实也蛮精炼的回顾了自己的成长，只不过对与耶鲁遥远了，文字熟悉到像是你家的我家的谁家的孩子的作文.....瞬间的爆发力、张力、感染力，看不到
作者: LIUX& & 时间:
中国的作文都写不好，怎么写感人的Essay？
作者: LIUX& & 时间:
记得一次面试，一个 Candidate说喜欢吃，最后也拿到了offer，每件事每个人的视角不一样，动人之处更不一样
作者: 绝版兔爷& & 时间:
其实写文章就是以小见大！但是咱小时候写文章总是要赋予很高的精神境界！
作者: 倒着走的钟& & 时间:
很完整，楼主辛苦！
作者: 神奇的考拉& & 时间:
作者: xmlo& & 时间:
非常感谢，我觉得好的文章首先是打动自己，自己相信，才能让别人相信。还有就是真实和自然
作者: diamonddddd& & 时间:
学习了、收藏了！很好！
作者: 皮皮的皮皮& & 时间:
儿子语文老师提倡一篇作文只写一件事。说东城批作文事件多了分数低。
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作者: 文化大革命& & 时间:
本帖最后由 文化大革命 于
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我在新加坡读了初中高中（same as many of 潜水校友们here），DIY , sat2170, 托112，被northwestern,uiuc录取，and cornell ED拒，comlumbia WL拒，还有N个排名靠前的大U直接拒了。结果我最后选择了英国的学校。
Tea, cool in nature, is a drink for those who act according to their beliefs, and possess virtues of humility.
- The Classic of Tea, Lu Yu (Sage of Tea, Tang Dynasty)
My father loves tea. He used to make it every morning. I, however, did not enjoy its rough bitterness. Neither had I been willing to ask him why he loved it so much: he had always seemed so distant from me.-
The shriveled tea leaves languished in t my father talked to me while performing his routine of tea making on that humid summer night at the dinner table. Time seemed to freeze at that moment. I ran into my room, slammed the door, hid myself in the quilt and cried bitterly. I was not able to understand how a father could decide to leave his daughter behind for three years to work in one of the most remote and impoverished villages in China. As a man of few words, my father left without an explanation a few days later. I comforted myself that my elusive father was just, once again, being elusive.
The dry tea leaves danced gracefully and blossomed like flowers as my father poured boiling water into the glass pot. Visitors from the village where my father had wor they had come thousands of miles to express their gratitude to my father for transforming their village and lives. Clean water, electricity, roads. Harvest, sheep, corns. My father listened attentively, sipping the cup of tea in his hand every now and then. I sat aside, and saw white color in his hair through the rising mist of the tea. I took a cup of tea myself and savored. For the first time the tea was no longer bitter. Its smoothne it traveled down, and left traces of rich, sweet fragrance in my mouth, delicate yet pure. The sweet flavor lingered. I finally understood my father’s love for tea. And like learning to appreciate tea, I finally learnt to read my father.
The aroma of the tea wafts quietly as I make myself a cup of tea every morning. It has been four years since I came over to study on my own in Singapore. Days passed and I learnt more, understood deeper and gained new insights. The great geographical distance did not stop my father's influence on me. I followed his path and embarked on a journey of improving the lives of those around me. The government of my hometown accepted my proposals to implement new measures to improve people’s lives. The free tuition project I organized benefited the less privileged children in the society. It is heartening to see people’s smiles and to realize that like my father, I can make a difference too.
The tea leaves in the cup sink down, forming piles of dark brown layers at the bottom. The water has turned brownish golden. It seems that I have become my father, whose life has been motivated by the respo I believe this motivation will steer mine too.
作者: Jennyww& & 时间:
Running 写得真不错。对平常事的感受和思考，思想的升华自然，而且意犹未尽。特别喜欢结尾，中文的翻译逊色了许多。
作者: bee88& & 时间:
多谢！！！
作者: LIUX& & 时间:
文化大革命 发表于
我在新加坡读了初中高中（same as many of 潜水校友们here），DIY , sat2170, 托112，被northwes ...
这篇的描述比较东方了，但还是情真意切！
有时觉得我们的孩子缺乏观察力，八股文太多了
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作者: 冷梦& & 时间:
文化大革命 发表于
欣赏五：Undergraduate College Application Essay Sample
From the time I was able to realize what a u ...
Essay很好。谢谢~~还要继续努力学习英语
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作者: yangyw70& & 时间:
学习了，谢谢主席
作者: 上善若水1& & 时间:
非常感谢！
作者: huckleberry& & 时间:
谢谢楼主！
作者: AZ96& & 时间:
好东西，已收藏。谢谢LZ!
作者: 三毛家的柠檬草& & 时间:
好东西，我来顶一个！
作者: stuerter& & 时间:
中国学生写的那个太过长了，翻译成英语前还需要修改，毕竟看eaasy的老师一看好多份文章，不可能篇篇看完，有的没有吸引力的很可能直接就丢一边了。
作者: jiazhuoedu& & 时间:
好啊，谢谢楼主啊
作者: raindrop& & 时间:
多谢楼主，拜读
作者: 青青小麦青青& & 时间:
收藏！谢谢
作者: jiadm0211& & 时间:
受教了，谢谢
作者: 夏日么么茶& & 时间:
文章写得好，着实不是一件容易的事。好多孩子中文作文都写得不好，何况英文呢。
作者: 铅笔橡皮& & 时间:
一个个的，都挺能写哈
作者: hui66& & 时间:
好东西，收藏了！
作者: 和悦者说& & 时间:
顶一下楼主，好东东~
作者: 苁蓉花& & 时间:
学习了，谢谢分享！
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作者: Friday007& & 时间:
中国孩子的作文缺乏真情与真实感，更缺乏激情，小大人的话太多，太世故！这自然跟我们的教育有关，有些是积习难返，不是想改就改得了的，这不能不说是中国语文教育的悲哀！感谢主席（楼主）分享了这么多的好文章，让我们耳目一新，看来写Essay才是真正的挑战！
作者: 战区观察猿& & 时间:
写的果然不错啊，从一开始就让人眼前一亮的~
作者: johnyin7389& & 时间:
一个父亲写给在美孩子的信：儿子，你在美国的照片让网友翻出来了，爸爸很被动，不过，你不要担心，爸爸嘴硬，爸爸不回应。你在美国少上中国的网路、论坛、微博，更不要看爸爸的言论，爸爸在国内反美，就是为了让你在美国更好的生活，爸爸在国内被骂成狗，就是为了让你在美国活成人样。少接触中国。
-----不许联想到司马南
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主席好帖啊，
慢慢学习。。。
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作者: 冷寒梅& & 时间:
谢谢主席的分享
作者: 我寄喜心与明月& & 时间:
感悟颇深，八股文行不通
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有收获。谢谢分享！
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