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Topic: Some people think university education should prepare students for employment while others think it should help students acquire theoretical knowledge. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
As the university education develops, there tend to be two main styles of education nowadays that one is for employment while the other is for theoretical knowledge. These two opposite educating style have raised a fierce discussion.
Apparently many people hold the opinion that tutors in university are supposed to teach students more about theoretical knowledge. It is conventional that in the campus, knowledge means the most significant essence to students and it is the soul of a university. The daily life which includes studying in classroom, finishing assignments and receiving examinations is the majority of the university’s primary function. What’s more, theoretical knowledge is still useful and helpful when students face several professional problems. The definition or formula in some chapter of some textbook may be the key to an important research. In other words, it is difficult to finish daily assignment without theoretical knowledge, let alone further one’s study.
On the contrary, there is a trend that increasing parents believe university education should teach their children more to get ready for employment. It is not uncommon that graduates have difficulty finding jobs compatible to their major especially those who major in some more theoretical field. As a consequence, students prefer some practical skills which could make them competitive in the recruitment competition in the future. Besides, the society in this new era prefers a comprehensive talent rather than a graduate full of theoretical knowledge but cannot make himself ordered. It is obviously that some skills like social communication are indispensable in almost every industry. So it requires university to prepare students for employment in return.
As far as I concern, no one can complete a long journey with one leg. Theoretical knowledge is the foundation to one’s career and the skills suitable to his employment are crucial to the final success. So university has a responsibility to make the graduate complete before they step into the society which means its education should focus on both theory and employment.
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As the university education develops, there tend [tends] to be two main styles of education nowadays that one is for employment while the other is for theoretical knowledge. [这个表达很口语化] These two opposite educating style[复数]&&have raised a fierce discussion.[作者观点]
Apparently many people hold the opinion that tutors in university are supposed to teach students more about theoretical knowledge. It is conventional that in the campus, knowledge means the most significant essence to students and it is the soul of a university. The daily life which includes studying in classroom, finishing assignments and receiving examinations is the majority of the university’s primary function.[主语和表达搭配有逻辑问题。]&&What’s more, theoretical knowledge is still useful and helpful when students face several professional problems. The definition or formula in some chapter of some textbook may be the key to an important research. In other words, it is difficult to finish daily assignment without theoretical knowledge, let alone further one’s study.[One's further study]
On the contrary, there is a trend that increasing parents believe university education should teach their children more to get ready for employment. It is not uncommon that graduates have difficulty finding jobs compatible to their major especially those who major in some more theoretical field[放在graduates后面更合适。] . As a consequence, students prefer some practical skills which could make them competitive in the recruitment competition in the future. Besides, the society in this new era prefers a comprehensive talent rather than a graduate full of theoretical knowledge but cannot make himself ordered. [Than后面加短语而不是加句子] It is obviously[Be后面加形容词]&&that some skills like social communication are indispensable in almost every industry. So it requires university to prepare students for employment in return.
As far as I concern,[I am concerned]&&no one can complete a long journey with one leg. Theoretical knowledge is the foundation to one’s career and the skills suitable to his employment are crucial to the final success. So university has a responsibility to make the graduate complete [Complete及物动词，后面要宾语]before they step into the society which means its education should focus on both theory and employment.
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