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我帮你整理一片罢了benefit and challenge of online shopping Today many people started to try online shopping. Not only it make life convenient, but also
Reduce the price of products.Online shopping appeals to people who don't
infact who just want to stay at home using the convenient of the internet to do so. It a new from of trade, comparing to the old face to dace trading before us. The price of online shopping are somewhat cheaper and more comparing between products, so people like to use it.
But every coin has two side, online shopping has its weakness, firstly the products are not alway as good as the picture you in the internet. Also customer never knew the condition of the product until they get it on delivery, unlike like hand to hand trading, In my opinion i do consider its a useful method for new style of shopping. Also it support our
Development for our society. We can keep using online shopping as a option to our choice
就这样吧4级应该过了吧
是 an option
不是 a option
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太给力了，你的回答完美解决了我的问题！
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shoppers can just click the mouse and getwhatever they want immediately 。给你一个小建议，用词和结构也改动了一些.Firstly.Online shopping is appealing to people whodon’t want to go outside, even if the most experienced buyer can never avoid gettingcheated when shopping online，帮你改了一些. And with theadvancing of our society. 改过了. In fact , to shop online may become part of the modern life toa large extent, apart from all thosedisadvantages I still reckon that it is a good way for shopping, lower price really is a competitive advantage to attract people whois not enthusiastic about bargaining.As every coin has two sides.In my point of view.It’s a new shopping trend. Secondly. People may feel upset to receive something different from what theywant, the goods online aren’t always what they actually are inreality，你的作文用词有点简单. Compared with shopsaround us, but alsocut the cost of traditional shopping. It not only makes people’s life more convenient,more and more people are in lovewith online shoppingNowadays , it also hasweaknesses
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出门在外也不愁我写的一篇英语作文帮麻烦修改下，谢谢_百度知道
我写的一篇英语作文帮麻烦修改下，谢谢
看下哪些句子有语法错误，哪些句子写的不好，写的部好麻烦帮我改下.我英语成绩非常烂，麻烦修改详细点啊千万不要像语法书上那样讲我看不懂
穿耿扁际壮宦憋为铂力
My school was very terrible. turning on the light is not allowed in the daytime.Some students wan to turn on the light.because the eyes of them was not good and （看不清黑板）.（如果我们把打开了 被学校发现就会罚款）
The WC of school was very very terrible.No water and nobody clean.Eery time I went there want to vomit.
Many teachers of school
was not duty to us.So many students’ grades was very terrible amd they always got a D this term.
我英语老师部管我们，我好跑到这里来了.这是我今天上课发牢骚写的.内容是真实的哦
括号里面的句子是我不会写的
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My school is very terrible.( 最好用一般现在时)It's not allowed to keep the light on in daytime.（这句用形式主语比较好）Some students want to turn on the light because their eyesight are not so good that they can't see the blackboard clearly.Ho穿耿扁际壮宦憋为铂力wever,if we turn on the light and was caught by school,we will be fined.The toilets in our school are so terrible.There's no water and nobody will clean them.That's makes me feel sick when I pass there.Many teachers in our school are not responsible for us.Therefore,lots of students are not good at study and they always get a
D grade in this term.
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实在太感谢了o(∩_∩)o
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如果是介绍学校的作文，最好用一般现在时。所以第一句最好改成“My school is very terrible.&看不清黑板的穿耿扁际壮宦憋为铂力： we can not look blackboard clearly.如果我们把打开了 被学校发现就会罚款:If
terned onthe light ,we would be fined .&nobody clean &改成 “nobody is empolyeed to clean it .& 温馨提示：同学，你的英语纯粹是中文版，希望你能先学好基本功。希望对你有帮助！
哦！怎么学好基本攻呢？
英语就是有语法和单词组成的，就像搭积木一样，只有先多记些词汇，再记记语法，多练习，多提问，还有一些语法书或许能帮到你。只要学好单词和语法，英语作文就小菜一碟了。
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我给你重新顺一遍吧：(全文用一般现在时)My school was very t穿耿扁际壮宦憋为铂力errible. Some students want to turn on the lights, because their eyesights(视力) are not good enough to see the blackboard clear. However, Turning on the lights is forbidden （禁止） in the daytime and we will be fined if we are caught turning on the lights. The toilets of the school are terribly awful as there is no water for washing and I want to vomit the moment I go into the toilet.(一进去就想吐).Most teachers of my school
are not duteous to us.So many students’ grades are very terrible and they always got a D this term. 很高兴能帮助到你~如果你满意~请选择为“满意答案”~谢谢支持哈~
My schoolMy school life is extremly awful. It's not allowed to turn on lights in classrooms during daytime and breaching this rule will be fined.
Though some students can't see the blackboard clearly, there's nothing they can do.(原文中时态不一致，语序也不太通顺，帮你重新理了一下并加了些连接词使得句子之间的联系不是那么生硬）The school restrooms also drive me mad. No water supply and nobody cleans them. I can't help vomiting whenever going there.(对个别词语改动了一下）Many of the teachers are not performing responsibly for students, thus lots of us get bad grades, such as D or worse.My English teacher doens't care about us at all, that's why I'm complaining right here at class time. All the contents I'm writing are real.（您对一些词语的理解有些误差所以在意思表达上选择了错误的词，例如duty的用法。我注意到你一直重复使用terrible，一般来说尽量避免。）希望对你有所帮助。如果满意请及时采纳。
I think my school is
terrible. And I am during the terrible everyday.First,
to trun the light on during the day and if we do that, we will get fined . But at the same time, so many students need the lighting. Because some students look hard at blackboard.Second, the toilet at our school is so dirty. There are no water and no cleaner. Everytime, when I go to the toilet, I fell sickness .Third,
poor exam grades in this term. I think the reason is that we don't have any professional and responsible teacher . 【上面是我根据你的意思写的，仅作参考==，个人水平不够啊。】 My schoolMy school was very terrible. 【首先我想说的是，因为你表述是一件实事，所以，用一般式就可以，不需要用过去式。was----is,以下同样改。】turning on the light is not allowed in the daytime. 【这里的问题是allow的用法了，allow sb. to do sth；allow doing sth；allow sb. in/out/up， 你如果非要用 allow…in的形式，在中间要加上sb， 第二个问题是，整个文章的时态是要统一的，第一句用过去式，第二句用现在时态可不行。这里了话，我建议用的是一般现在时。】Some students want to turn on the light.【语法上这句是没有错的，但是还是时态问题，这里出现的也是一般现在时态。】because the eyes of them was not good and （看不清黑板）.（如果我们把打开了 被学校发现就会罚款）【我改写的部分没有加上“他们的眼睛不是很好”这句话，我直接说他们看黑板很困难，因为我觉得这样就够了，简洁，明了。】The WC of school was very very terrible.【理论上讲，这句话是可行的，但是还是时态问题，要统一时态哦~】No water and nobody clean.【这句话就出大问题了。其一，water 是名词，nobody clean 这是N+VI 完整的主谓结构，这样的情况下是不能用并列的，就像，说：“水和我要和的水”这样的句子看上逻辑也很奇怪。所以是不行的，结论也就是and 不可以用在这里。其二，每个单独的句子一定有主语谓语，（祈使句的用法比较特别，这里就不多说，），所以，你的句子不成完整句，要有主语和谓语才行，你得说“厕所没有水也没有人清理”对吧？可以用there are/is……It‘s……这样的句式来写。】Eery time I went there want to vomit.【首先everytime 连写比较。其次这句话有两个谓语，went 和want，两个谓语又没有连词，像and、but、或者引导词which、that、这样的，是不行的。就像中文说，“你是是一个学生”，这样有两个谓语直接在一个句子逻辑上也是行不通的，所以用谓语动词的时候，要注意。另外就是vomit这个词，我常见的还是sickness这个单词（==个人能力不够）所以，最后我改成了Everytime, when I go to the toilet, I fell sickness .】Many teachers of school
was not duty to us.【这里的问题是duty这个单词，这个单词是个名字，不能做谓语，也没有见过 be duty to的用法（请大神指教），不过有一个这个词be duty-bound to； duty-bound adj. 责无旁贷的,义不容辞的。以免你弄混，你还是不要记这个好了，只要知道duty是名词，你那样写了be duty to 直译了话就是“是责任”。和你要表达的老师对我们不负责任有差距，可以用 be responsible for， 用responsible 这个词比较好。】So many students’ grades was very terrible amd they always got a D this term【语法上，this term 表示的是现在这个学期吧？但是整句用的是过去式哦。这样不符合语法的。】以上，纯属个人意见。欢迎指点迷津~ 上面有朋友说，你一直在重复用terrible ，的确这里很有多的替换词，还有替换的句型，你可以不要一直重复用N of N 的形式。
我不知道你的语法怎么用的，看着我都无语。中间的那个，你找百度上翻译器，能翻译到、你的时态用过去时的话，也没关系
老师没有教过我们语法
你可以说的离谱一点么我对你已经很佩服了
你不信算了，我们老师说考试部不语法，不学也没有关系
什么狗屁老师我中考考试全是考语法和经典句型
they can not see the blackboard.If we turn the light on ,we will be found to be fine
看不清黑板 Can not see the blackboard clearly如果我们把打开了 If we turn on the lights,we will be fined
我要修改作文啊
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出门在外也不愁高中英语作文,帮我改下作文谢谢,满分是25分&_百度作业帮
高中英语作文,帮我改下作文谢谢,满分是25分&
没太搞明白你要表达的中心.但能看到一颗努力进取的心.不错啊.有个别小错误应改为：student,trouble. more brave and confident改为braver and more confident. 最后一句话是病句,你要说什么?
你读初中，高中还是大学？
新华的？..话说字数都不够吧...
恩，100左右就可以了
帮忙改下啦，英语不是很好想提高的说
高中！最近在补英语！
被我改下吧~
帮我改下吧~
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评一下我的英语四级作文分数并帮我改一下，谢谢
n Students'.On the contrary.But a lecthrer who a student select musy be one who they are interested in,I agree it very much because of be our choice without anybody.Besides.In terms of selecting lecturerst like their lectures after having a few of courses,and they will be concentrated on having class in classroom.
Academicians can select lecturers by themselves.It is very popular with their hearts,it happend to studentsthat they don'.It can make them bo on their mind to good study their courses,in terms of good side.It brings not only some advantages but also some possible problems.
In my opinions,some univercity allow their students to choose free Selecting Lecturers
Nowadays an academician has more and more choices refer to himself in the univercity.It is the main factor to select their lecturers fot students,as an modern academician,it is very complex things to changing their lecturers
&select their lecturers fot students&那个是for
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不是打击的话，然后总结，所以要重视，而且文章的结构都是一样的，你只要按这个结构写的话。大学英语四六级的作文写作，多看一下别人的范文和一些用的好的句子，一般来说都是写的议论文。不仅是语法和单词的问题，在这个问题上，到时候考试也好套用。作文的话我就不帮忙改了，老师打分的话最多只有个辛苦分这篇文章若是考试时候写的话，作文拿90分是没有问题的。此题目的意思是关于学生选课的问题，你可以先说现在的大学普遍存在着允许学生选课这个现象，你自己总结一下经验，然后就这个现象给出自己的两三点看法。还有就是作文在四六级考试中占很大的比例的，还存在着偏题的问题
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出门在外也不愁我刚刚写了篇英语作文，请各路高手帮我修改，指导我下，谢谢！ 英语作文如下：_百度知道
我刚刚写了篇英语作文，请各路高手帮我修改，指导我下，谢谢！ 英语作文如下：
Fire is dangerous, so we should care about Personal safety, when we go out .but Electricity is more dangerous, we should not use fire, we will be happy every day,we also should keep safe. because we can be hurt by fire,we should
pay attention to traffic safety.
Secondly,we should obey the traffic rules, or else that is against the rules. Before we cross the raod . If we are at home alone.
If we do every things carefully. we should use electricity carefully.It is dangerous to touch
the television with wet handSafety
The Spring Festival is coming soon, when we stay at home
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Make sure that fire doesn', which is the best way of practice fire safety. Fire is dangerous, so we should care about Personal safety。春节与注意安全无直接因果关系）
Firstly. Secondly. If we are at home alone. Firstly, when we stay at home . because we can be(can be 替换为will be) hurt by fire(用it代替fire，这里可用指代), we should pay attention to traffic safety, steer clear crazy drivers. Make sure yot break out in the first place. Best wishes on this holiday season, when we go out 。）
Secondly.but Electricity is more dangerous,we also should（是should also而不是also should） keep safe（keep safe应替换为keep safety in mind）, we will be happy every day.(so的用法. Before we cross the raod （是road!Promoting Safety Awareness during the Festival
Spring festival is at the corner and it is still important for us to keep personal safety in mind in this moment.It is dangerous to touch
the television（television换做electrical appliances会更好） with wet hand, check all the electrical appliances,因为之前已提到fire.（with wet hand应替换为 with a wet hand 或 with wet hands)
If we do every things carefully,而不是raod),we should
pay attention to traffic safety, we should not use fire（use fire的用法不正确, or else that is against the rules.（or后面的话无实际表达意义,we should obey the traffic rules. we should use electricity carefully. Besides. Also, be aware of potential hazards in your homeSafety
The Spring Festival is coming soon,英文中的用法为make a fire)
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It is dangerous to touch
an outlet （插座）with wet hand.
If we do every thing去掉s
carefully, we will be happy every day. Fire is dangerous, when we stay at home ，too, when we go out ,we also should keep safe. because we may be hurt by fire。 we should not use fire. we should use electricity carefullyThe Spring Festival is coming soon,
Secondly.but Electricity is more dangerous,we should
pay attention to the busy traffic
Before we cross the raod .
Firstly, so we should care about Personal safety,we should obey the traffic rules
你的问题在于词汇太过匮乏，不是should就是dangerous，让人看得不舒服。The Spring Festival is coming soon--coming就有快来的意思，不需要再加上soon。而且春节快来了，与你要注意人生安全又有什么关系呢？这里你应该举出一些例子，比如燃放烟火爆竹，小偷问题，以及车站拥挤等。所以我们要提高自我保护意识。traffic safety前面加the，raod 应该是road，we should obey the traffic rules遵守交通规则应该是每个人的责任，所以这里你可以把should改成must。or else that is against the rules这句话有点罗嗦了，可以写成we must obey the traffic rules not against the rules。If we are at home alone, we should not use fire. because we can be hurt by fire. Fire is dangerous.but Electricity is more dangerous. we should use electricity carefully.It is dangerous to touch
the television with wet hand.这一段话的承接问题很大。首先你说如果我们一个人在家，就不能够用火了，可是你说的太过绝对，把一竿子的人都给打死了，难道中老年人都不应该用火嘛！Fire is dangerous.but Electricity is more dangerous.你刚开始进入主题说火很危险，却一下子又说电更危险，思路未免转的太快，没有自然地有火过渡到电上。而且电不属于专业名词，不需要大写首字母。It is dangerous to touch
the television with wet hand。语法错误，而且你要说的是用湿的手去碰插头什么的，并不就是television。If we do every things carefully。这里应该是everthing。内容简单了点，而且一直在“危险”这个词语上徘徊，我不知道你是读什么年纪的，所以只是按着改了一下，可能有点难了。如果你觉得英文写不出来，可以用中文尽可能地把他写完整，然后用灵格斯翻译家把他翻译出来，你再改一改。（这个软件比有道，google什么的翻得好一点，不会让你看了那么吐血。）这只是没办法的时候才用的方法，你权衡一下要不要用。因为实在是教坏小孩子-_-|||
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