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Parents Should/Shouldn’t Control the Behavior of Their ChildrenShould parents control the behavior of their children? This is always the controversial topic among people. Some people believe that parents should control the behavior of their children whereas the others hold the opposite view. From my point of view, I think parents should guide the behavior of their children to the right direction while give they enough space to do their own jobs. On the one hand, many children get the weaker will power, so they can’t control their behavior by themselves sometimes. For examples, fray in the game, cheat in the exam. Therefore, parents have the responsibility and right to correct their wrong behaviors to prevent the further damage at these times. On the other hand, many children have the unconstrained imagination and that are different from adults’. Therefore, parents should try to understand and encourage these odd ideas and wonderful thoughts. In the end, different parents hold different points on parents should control their children’s behavior or not, but the hope of parents is same that they want to give children a healthy and balance growth space. My attitude is to guide, lead and demonstrate the right behavior of children instead of to limit, restrict or punish the wrong behavior of children. Attending TV PK Shows Does (or Does No) Good to Young PeopleNowadays, more and more TV PK shows appeared and attracted the eyes of many people. Furthermore, some individuals, especially the young, like to attend the TV PK shows because they may become famous after one night. Lots of people are strongly opposed this phenomenon since they consider that attending TV PK is very harmful to the young people. Meanwhile, the others have the different opinion. Attending TV PK shows, of course, has both merits and shortcoming for young people. On the one hand, it makes young people more confident, active and experienced. On the other hand, every coin has two sides. Attending TV PK shows also has some disadvantages. For example, it wastes young people so much time, it confuses young people and induces them lost their aims. Personally, I agree with that the young people could participate in TV PK shows selectively. First and foremost, clear up the prime aim. Young people should set a clear goal in life and try best to achieve it. Furthermore, evaluate the situation before decided to attending TV PK shows. To think about it is this TV PK show worthy to spend time, money and energy to attend it. Last but not least, follow suggestions from parents. In general, parents get more life experience, thus, they can provide reasonable advice to young people.
All in all, attending TV PK shows is half angel and half devil. I support young people to attend it selectively. What’s your opinion?
Parents Should/Shouldn’t Control the Behavior of Their Children
Should parents control the behavior of their children? This is always the controversial topic among people. Some people believe that parents should control the behavior of their children whereas the others hold the opposite view.
From my point of view, I think parents should guide the behavior of their children to the right direction while give they enough space to do their own jobs. On the one hand, many children get the weaker will power, so they can’t control their behavior by themselves sometimes. For examples, fray in the game, cheat in the exam. Therefore, parents have the responsibility and right to correct their wrong behaviors to prevent the further damage at these times. On the other hand, many children have the unconstrained imagination and that are different from adults’. Therefore, parents should try to understand and encourage these odd ideas and wonderful thoughts.
In the end, different parents hold different points on parents should control their children’s behavior or not, but the hope of parents is same that they want to give children a healthy and balance growth space. My attitude is to guide, lead and demonstrate the right behavior of children instead of to limit, restrict or punish the wrong behavior of children.
Attending TV PK Shows Does (or Does No) Good to Young People
Nowadays, more and more TV PK shows appeared and attracted the eyes of many people. Furthermore, some individuals, especially the young, like to attend the TV PK shows because they may become famous after one night. Lots of people are strongly opposed this phenomenon since they consider that attending TV PK is very harmful to the young people. Meanwhile, the others have the different opinion.
Attending TV PK shows, of course, has both merits and shortcoming for young people. On the one hand, it makes young people more confident, active and experienced. On the other hand, every coin has two sides. Attending TV PK shows also has some disadvantages. For example, it wastes young people so much time, it confuses young people and induces them lost their aims.
Personally, I agree with that the young people could participate in TV PK shows selectively. First and foremost, clear up the prime aim. Young people should set a clear goal in life and try best to achieve it. Furthermore, evaluate the situation before decided to attending TV PK shows. To think about it is this TV PK show worthy to spend time, money and energy to attend it. Last but not least, follow suggestions from parents. In general, parents get more life experience, thus, they can provide reasonable advice to young people.
All in all, attending TV PK shows is half angel and half devil. I support young people to attend it selectively. What’s your opinion?
见2楼,格式清楚点
<font color="#9170171 发表于
见2楼,格式清楚点
先说下第一篇吧
Parents Should/Shouldn’t Control the Behavior of Their Children
Should parents control the behavior of their children? This is always the controversial topic among people. Some people believe that parents should control the behavior of their children whereas the others hold the opposite view.
From my point of view, I think parents should guide the behavior of their children to the right direction while give they enough space to do their own jobs. On the one hand, many children get the weaker will power, so they can’t control their behavior by themselves sometimes. For examples, fray in the game, cheat in the exam. Therefore, parents have the responsibility and right to correct their wrong behaviors to prevent the further damage at these times. On the other hand, many children have the unconstrained imagination and that are different from adults’. Therefore, parents should try to understand and encourage these odd ideas and wonderful thoughts.（这离behavior是不是有点扯远了？）
In the end, different parents hold different points on parents should control their children’s behavior or not, but the hope of parents is same that they want to give children a healthy and balance growth space. My attitude is to guide, lead and demonstrate the right behavior of children instead of to limit, restrict or punish the wrong behavior of children.
1、我觉得lz对定冠词、不定冠词这方面有些欠缺，见蓝色部分。
2、另外红色部分有些语法错误，如：
so they can’t control their behavior by themselves sometimes. For examples, fray in the game, cheat in the exam.
前面这个句子sometimes放于句尾读起来有些不大“和谐”，是否将sometimes调整到they前会好些？；后面这个句子是个无主句兼流水句。
fray in the game, cheat in the exams这里的fray的韦氏词典定义：
transitive verb
a : to wear (as an edge of cloth) by or as if by rubbing :
b : to separate the threads at the edge of
&tempers became a bit frayed&
intransitive verb
: to wear out or into shreds
: to show signs of strain &fraying nerves&
不知道lz的fray 这里是什么意思？
3、different parents hold different points on parents should control their children’s behavior or not, but the hope of parents is same that they want to give children a healthy and balance growth space.
hold different points on...后面跟的是一个句子？加上whether就万事ok了。
healthy并列的话应该是balanced吧，但平衡的成长空间好像也不大顺口诶。
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Attending TV PK Shows Does (or Does No) Good to Young People
标题一定程度上代表着文章的内容、主题，为什么还要does(or does no)呢？
就好像“他是/不是好人”这样的标题一样蹩脚。
Nowadays, more and more TV PK shows appeared and attracted the eyes of many people. Furthermore, some individuals, especially the young, like to attend the TV PK shows because they may become famous after one night. Lots of people are strongly opposed （少了介词to） this phenomenon since they consider that attending TV PK is very harmful to the young people. Meanwhile, the others have the different opinion（仍然是定冠词、不定冠词的问题，others have different opinions.）.
Attending TV PK shows, of course, has both merits and shortcoming for young people. On the one hand, it makes young people more confident, active and experienced. On the other hand, every coin has two sides. Attending TV PK shows also has some disadvantages. For example, it wastes young people so much time, it confuses young people and induces them lost their aims.
on the one hand...on the other hand...
（以对称的角度讲，on the one hand...on the other hand后面应该直接跟TV PK shows的缺点就OK了，every coion has two sides可放在最前面 ）
可以这样改一下：Every coin has two sides. Attending TV PK shows also has merits and demerits/drawbacks/flaws/limits. On the one hand, it makes young people more confident, active and experienced, which is very condusive to thei On the other hand, it may consume a lot of time, Even worse, youngsters may get lost in these competitions and be deprived of goals in life and study.
Personally, I agree with that(agree that就OK了) the young people could participate in TV PK shows selectively. First and foremost, clear up the prime aim（这是什么意思？）. Young people should set a clear goal in life and try best to achieve it. Furthermore, evaluate the situation before decided（before是介词，后面跟ving） to attending TV PK shows. To think about it is this TV PK show worthy to spend time, money and energy to attend it. Last but not least, follow suggestions from parents. In general, parents get more life experience, thus, they can provide reasonable advice to young people.
All in all, attending TV PK shows is half angel and half devil. I support young people to attend it selectively. What’s your opinion
非常感谢斑竹的指点,
这2篇作文完全是自己写,没有用任何模板或者经典句型什么的.我想看看完全自己写作文是怎么样子的! 看来问题很多呀!
下面一些问题点请教斑竹:
首先,我知道others, the others的区别,一个是有些,一个是剩下的人,我就是想表达”SOME PEOPLE有这个观点,其余的人是另外的观点”这个意思
是不是这样的表达方法在英语文法里错的?
关于第2篇标题,这个标题本来就是这样,不是我起的
第三,修改的作文稍后俸上,烦劳斑竹修改
另外,请教斑竹这些作文目前是什么水平?我该怎么提高作文水平?
您的意见似乎主要是加强语法,我是不是该背些作文常用句型什么的开始入手?
最后,再次感谢斑竹
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非常感谢斑竹的指点,
这2篇作文完全是自己写,没有用任何模板或者经典句型什么的.我想看看完全自己写作文是 ...
Should parents control the behavior of their children? This is always the controversial topic among people. Some people believe that parents should control the behavior of their children whereas the others hold the opposite view.
From my point of view, I think parents should guide the behavior of their children to the right direction while give they enough space to do their own jobs. On the one hand, many children get the weaker will power, so they can’t control their behavior by themselves sometimes.
Meanwhile, the others have the different opinion
the是定冠词，表示特指，a/an是不定冠词，泛指；
下划线的三处明显不需要特指，泛指即可。又如：
I don't like the hat, i like the one hanging on the wall.(特指挂在墙上的那个)
I would love to have a cup of tea.(泛指一杯茶，不该特指the cup of tea)
others 与the others的区别：
others 和some对比使用时, 是“有些”的意思而不是做“其他”讲, 如:Some cleaned the windows, while others mopped the floor. 有的擦窗户, 有的擦地板。又如：Some like tea, while others like coffee.the others 是“其余的”意思,表示在一个范围内的其他全部, 如: This dictionary is better than the others. 这本字典比别[其余]的好。 the other 是其中的“另一个”, 如:G not this one. 给我那一个,不是这一个。 两个中的“另一个”是“the other”; 不定数目中的“另一个”是“another” , 如:This glass is broken. Get me another. 这个杯子坏了, 给我另拿一个来。(在许多杯子中的一个)
我觉得lz整体水平还是不错的，文章还是言之有物的，但在细节方面需要加强。
<font color="#9170171 发表于
非常感谢斑竹的指点,
这2篇作文完全是自己写,没有用任何模板或者经典句型什么的.我想看看完全自己写作文是 ...
其实个人觉得作文不是模板套出来的、还是不要用模板毒害咱们这么有潜力的孩子的好。
文章无非是为了表达思想，阐述观点，言之有物、观点明确、论据充分才是最重要的，一些小语法错误也没什么。
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非常感谢斑竹的指点,
这2篇作文完全是自己写,没有用任何模板或者经典句型什么的.我想看看完全自己写作文是 ...
Attending TV PK Shows Does (or Does No) Good to Young People
作文给的标题是这样，但你写文章时候可不能这样作为标题；
就好像文章的题目是“你最喜欢/讨厌的一个人”，难道写作文时候要把标题写为“你最喜欢/讨厌的一个人”吗？
不能，你会写“我最喜欢的一个人”或者“我最讨厌的一个人”，是吧？
受教了,斑竹辛苦,码了那么多字.仔细学习斑竹的内容
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& Comsenz Inc.求高手修改英语作文!Today,I gotup at seven‘o clock.At first ,I brushed myteeth and washed my face.Then,I ate bread and drank a bottle of milk as mybreakfast.Finally,I wrote my biology homework.After dinner.My fatherand I go to the gym.And ran two rounds the gym.Then,we played tennis the pasthour.I feel very happy.
第二行as应该改为for吧,as不顺眼.那个finally可不可以改成after that?第三行go改为went ,And后加we,两处the前面加in.其实你的today是什么意思?是指当写日记一样叙述今天发生的事情还是什么.
we played tennis the pasthour改为we spent half an hour in playing tennis
是不是表示用了一个半小时打乒乓球？这样表达更好一些
球采纳谢谢
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as改为for，my breakfast 去掉my，wrote 改为did，go to the gym 中 go改为went，ran two rounds in the gym，把 the pasthour 去掉，可写成we played tennis there。i felt very happy
时间上过渡性有点大，而且过去式运用不到位。应该是 My father and I went
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1、题和立意凡考试作文必须审题，原因是考生要在同一环境下，作公平的竞争。审题，就是要对试题展现的所有内容作全面、准确的审读和理解，把命题者的意图读出来，把题目的各种限制审清楚，明确要我写，怎么写，写到程度，真正做到全面领会，深刻把握，不偏不漏、不折不扣地按要求写作文。高考作文评判明确规定，凡审题有问题的试卷最后得分一般都不超过二类卷最低分。由此可见，审题的准确与否是作文成败的关键因素。立意，就是要作者站在时代的高度，去观察、认识，提炼主题，使主题体现时代的精神，既反映时代，也作用于时代，跳动时代的脉搏，推动着时代的前进。文章的“意”， 其实就是作者在体验中逐步孕育而成的一种思想，是作者的主观认识与客观实际相“撞击”的产物，它反映作者的思想水平、认识水平以及在社会生活中形成的世界观、人生观、价值观等。近两年的作文教改提倡学生写真实生活、真实自我，有些忽视了对文章思想倾向的把握，看问题不全面，观点偏激，更有甚者由腐败现象而怀疑党的领导和党的政策。尽管当今的中国社会政治清明，言论自由，话说错了不会追查什么政治问题，但作为未来社会的建设者，正确的是非观还是应该有的。这一点必须注意。　　
2、标题和段落标题是文章的眼睛，也是阅卷老师对文章的第一印象，特别是自拟题目写作，阅卷老师很看重考生所拟的标题。俗话说：“秧好一半谷，题好一半文”，可见题目的重要性。有些考生先写正文再拟标题，文章写好后也许是没有时间写标题，也许是忘了补写标题。虽然评分规定无标题扣2分，但实际结果却远非2分。有人曾做过这样的实验，将几篇写得较好的作文，按保留标题和隐去标题两种类型请两组老师分别予以阅卷，其分数差别一般都在5分以上。这是因为阅卷老师对无标题作文产生了一种心理距离，不知不觉便降低了分数等级。至于如何拟题，我觉得应做到这样几条：①确切。指符合文章内容，也指遣词造句符合规范)。②精练。指标题字数恰当。③生动。指题目能体现出一种活力，具有可读性，饶有情趣。④新颖。指有新视角、新思路、新感悟，能够给人一种新鲜感。⑤有意蕴。指有内在的含义。拟题方法多种多样，可以运用修辞拟题，可以引用俗语拟题，可以化用古语拟题，可以借用成语拟题，可以套用流行语拟题，也可以巧用学科公式或符号拟题等等，考生可以根据自己的情况灵活运用。段落：考试作文最忌首、腹、尾三段式的结构。把文章分为几段更好?千字以内的作文，我觉得分为5-8个自然段就可以了。因为自然段分得越自然，越显得你成熟老练。另外，要把每一段的首句写好。每一段的首句犹如人的眉目，把首句写好，“眉清目秀”，整个段落都显着精神。
3、文体和内容高考作文试题对文体的要求有两类：一类是规定必须写某种文体，如“写一篇议论文”;另一类是排除写某种文体，如“除诗歌外，其他文体不限”。考生必须按规定的文体去写。近几年高考作文题中“文体不限”，让考生自由选择文体，这里要特别注意，文体不限不是不要文体，而是要你在选择了一种文体后，一定要按这种文体特点写作，要写什么象什么。不可随心所欲，写成不伦不类的“四不像”文章。文章内容方面：不假思索就能想到的东西，绝对不要写;稍加思索想到的也不要写;花上几分钟，想别人想不到的内容来写。记叙文最好将主人公设定为自己，用第一人称入文，让“我”的激情在文章中闪光，情真意切，引起共鸣。议论文切忌大话、套话、废话，要避免空发议论，无病呻吟，滥提口号，乱发号召，空表决心等等。作文可以虚构，“允许”编写故事，但不等于提倡“编写故事”，编写故事要做到“大胆，自圆其说”。滥编、胡编，绝对不会得高分。
4、开头和结尾应试作文的开头结尾，就是文章的刀刃。平时在课内外所学的各种开头结尾的方法完全可以用在应试作文上。不管你使用什么方法开头和结尾，必须做到开头起笔入题，结尾点明主旨。为了给评卷老师一个好的印象，开头结尾千万不要涂抹。有道是：良好的开端是成功的一半。可有些考生犯“入题慢”的毛病：有的把大段的原材料全部照搬;有的把本来简洁的原材料进行扩展;有的开篇摆材料，古今中外，慢慢道来。开篇松散，占去了大量的篇幅，后面的真正应该说的内容却“千呼万唤不出来”，有的只是一笔带过，草草收兵，比例严重失调，使老师难以衡量其实际写作水平。古人写文章讲究“凤头”、“猪肚”、“豹尾”，这是有一定道理的。可有些考生作文来不及刹尾，或用一句话硬断，或点上一串省略号，这样即使你雕出了“凤头”，壮大了“猪肚”，也会因为没有“豹尾”而不成其好文章，得不到高分。阅卷老师衡量一篇文章的好坏，首先是看其整体。所以，考生交给老师的无论如何也应是一篇完整的作文。
5、语言和字数考试作文语言要规范准确，具有个性和活力。不要文白夹杂;不要使用别人看不懂的方言和词汇;少用长句多用短句;可引进部分时代新词汇，引用名言警句，引用流行的通俗歌曲歌词，引用百姓口头民谣，但取向一定要积极向上，真正让语言亮起来。照理说，文章是表情达意的工具，有话则长，无话则短，似乎不应有字数的限制。但考试作文，作为一种特殊形式的作文，为了达到一定的考查目的，并考虑到考试时间等因素，一般对字数都作了规定。我们必须按照规定去做。限最低字数的，一定要写够数量或稍微超过50―100字才好。如果字数不足，虽然评分标准规定，不足字数的，每少50字扣1分，但实际情况是，字数不足往往被认为文章内容单薄，分数很难上档次。限最高字数的，不要超过。否则，给人一种臃肿的感觉，再说，作文写得长，花的时间多，解答前面的题用的时间少，必定会受到影响。如果没有限最高字数，一般就是以作文纸为限，即要在作文纸格子内行文。千万不要自作多情，超出作文格子，以免出力不讨好。
6、书写和卷面近年高考作文评分标准中，书写都占相当的比分。一般不要求写得好看，但要求书写整齐易辨认，一笔一画清清楚楚，不写草字。标点符号书写也要规范，特别是格式要正确，句号、逗号、问号、叹号、顿号、分号不要出现在一行之首;引号、括号、书名号前半不出现在一行之末，可以在这些符号后面挤着写一个字;引号、括号、书名号后一半不出现在一行之首，可以把这些符号挤在上一行之末。省略号、破折号占两个格，不能断开，写不下时挤在一行之末。至于作文的卷面，正如人的容貌一样，给人的印象是重要的，尤其是高考作文，卷面整洁与否直接影响着阅卷老师的心理和情绪，书写工整，卷面清洁，让人一看心中先喜三分，其结果是可想而知的。
7、检查与修改考试作文试题和其他试题一样，做完后也需要认真检查，看有没有笔误的错别字，有没有不通顺的句子，有没有需要调整的内容。审查发现了错别字、错用了词语一定要修改过来，对于句段该删的要删掉，该增的要增补，只是要改得清楚、整洁，使人一目了然。不能因为修改而影响了卷面的整洁。
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