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老师要求写一篇500字的议论文,感觉自己有好多语法错误呀...麻烦大家一起来帮我改改了,谢谢拉..英语一直不是我的强项,这次要求写一篇500字的英语作文,更让我犯难了题目是&论幸福&,写完感觉犯了好多语法错误想请大家一起帮我修改一下谢谢拉..On happinessHappiness has no shape, no color, and no weight. It can’t be seen and touched. So that happiness always is considered as a mysterious thing. Even people think it is hard to posses. To tell the truth, happiness just depends on which view do you perspective. Generally speaking, the one who weep for the past or fear for the future both are not the real happy people. In my opinion, there are no secrets on happiness. Happiness is a simple thing. It means living in the now. That is to say, we are happy if we keep our focus on the present moment. Happiness is willing to follow you as long as you understand how to appreciate all that you have right now.Happiness not belongs to the people who weep for the past. Everyone’s past is filled with regrets that may still cause pain. Whatever happened is in the past, and nothing can change that. That is like you shed tears when you missed the sun. Then you also miss the stars. You can not watch the shining stars with hands cover your eyes. As well as you can not feel the happiness in the present with heart open to the past. But the people who know the meaning of happiness will remind themselves to forget missing the sun instead of remembering to enjoy watching stars. Everyone desires to be a happy people. Why not hold on the memory only allow the damage to continue into the present.Happiness not belongs to the people who fear for the future. Nobody can feel happy to look into the future with eyes of fear. What’s more, people will lose ample happiness for concerned about future. People often do not cherish what they already have but chase for what they can not get. That is like someone mesmerized in imagine being a superstar in some day while reluctant to satisfy with being an excellent student now. In fact, a happy people is who has proper aim but enjoy his actual situation. Many of us, however, are ignorant of the truth.The real happy people is one who is living in the now and enjoying what they have. They cherish and appreciate every moment. They are sensible enough to get fun from daily life. They feel happy because today they solve a problem, not because yesterday they won praise.After all, past is changeless and future is yet to come. Why not enjoy the present and appreciate what you have to be a happy people?
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On happiness Happiness has no shape, no color, and no weight. It can’t be seen and touched. So happiness
is always considered as a mysterious thing. Even people think it is hard to posses. To tell the truth, happiness just depends on which view
you perspective. Generally speaking, the ones who weep for the past or fear for the future
are not the real happy people. In my opinion, there are no secrets on happiness. Happiness is a simple thing. It means living in the now. That is to say, we are happy if we keep our focus on the present moment. Happiness is willing to follow you as long as you understand how to appreciate all that you have
now. Happiness does not belong
to the people who weep for the past. Everyone’s past is filled with regrets that it may still cause pain. What happened is in the past, and nothing can change that. That is like you shed tears when you missed the sun. Then you also miss the stars. You can not watch the shining stars with hands covered your eyes. As well as you can not feel the happiness in the present with heart open to the past. But the people who know the meaning of happiness will remind themselves to remember to enjoy watching instead of
missing the sun . Everyone desires to be a happy people. Why not hold on the memory only allow the damage to continue into the present. Happiness not belongs to the people who fear for the future. Nobody can feel happy to look into the future with eyes of fear. What’s more, people will lose ample happiness for concerned about future. People often do not cherish what they already have but chase for what they can not get. That is like someone mesmerized in imagine being a superstar in some day while reluctant to satisfy with being an excellent student now. In fact, a happy people is who has proper aim but enjoy his actual situation. Many of us, however, are ignorant of the truth. The real happy people is one who is living in the now and enjoying what they have. They cherish and appreciate every moment. They are sensible enough to get fun from daily life. They feel happy because today they solve a problem, not because yesterday they won praise. After all, past is changeless and future is yet to come. Why not enjoy the present and appreciate what you have to be a happy people?好好学习 加油！~
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As the saying goes: “Toothache is not a disease actually, *but it will torments you as long as it happens（原句过于刻板）.” I totally agree with(同意某事，固定搭配） this sentence because I have had this kind of feelin...
As the saying goes: “Compared with toothache itself, pain matters” I really agree with this sentence, because I used to have this kind of feeling. One day,
when I was having lunch,
I hurt my tooth ....
My First Tooth ExtractionAs the saying goes: “Toothache is not a disease, but the pain is terrible.” I do agree with it, because I had experinced what happened to me. One day, I hurt one of my te...
As the saying goes: “Toothache is not a disease, but the pain is terrible.” I do agree with it, because I had experinced what happened to me. One day, I hurt one of my teeth during my lunch .The tooth was then getting loose. As the result, I was in very bad pain .So I went to see the dentist. At the same time, I experinced terrible pain from all of my teeth. The dentist seemed to be
horrible and in no motion.He said to me: “Open your mouth!” As soon as I opened my mouth, he put a cold and hard tweezers into my mouth, pulling out a tooth. Wow, my god! Too pain to say a word. I was hurt in tears. Eventurally, my treatment was finished.
I was very hungry, so my mom took me to eat something. Afterwards, my tooth was getting better. It was really an interesting but a terrible experience!
As the saying goes:" toothache is not a disease, pain that is so terrible." I very much agree with this sentence, because I also had the same experience. One day, I was having lunch, suddenly hurt my ...
between I and my parents is a wall that make（made） of paper. 望采纳~ 额，对不起，我对英语一窍不通.
没看见要求？！请帮忙看一下这篇英语作文,请修改出其中的错误.My experiences on New Year's DayNew Year is the best important thing for Chinese.On this New Year's Day,I went to my hometown and visit my grandparents.My grandparents live in a small v_百度作业帮
请帮忙看一下这篇英语作文,请修改出其中的错误.My experiences on New Year's DayNew Year is the best important thing for Chinese.On this New Year's Day,I went to my hometown and visit my grandparents.My grandparents live in a small v
请帮忙看一下这篇英语作文,请修改出其中的错误.My experiences on New Year's DayNew Year is the best important thing for Chinese.On this New Year's Day,I went to my hometown and visit my grandparents.My grandparents live in a small villageand the sight is different from the city.During the stay in my grandparents' house,I did lots of things.But there is something makes me very happy .Let me show you about them!In the evening of New Year's Day,my grandpa lit up a fire!The fire was very light,very strong and very warm!We all stood beside the fire and we felt very happy.After that,we were all tired and hungry.So we go back to the room.To our surprise,there were many plates of dumplings on the table.They were made by my grandma.They are delicious and we eat them happily!What a nice day!Although the day is pass,it will always be missed by me!
My experiences on New Year's DayNew Year is the best important 【最重要-most important 】thing【事件-event】 for Chinese.On this New Year's Day,I went to my hometown and visit【过去式-visited】 my grandparents.My grandparents live in a small village and the sight 【风景-scenery,sight表示视野,加一个there】is different from the city.During the stay in my grandparents' house,I did lots of things.But there is something makes me very happy .【转折关系不对...用and更好~】Let me show you about them!In the evening of New Year's Day,my grandpa lit up a fire!The fire was very light【明亮的 用bright 更好】,very strong and very warm!We all stood beside the fire and we felt very happy.After that,we were all tired and hungry.So we go back to the room.To our surprise,there were many plates of dumplings on the table.They were made by my grandma.They are delicious and we eat【过去式-ate】 them happily!What a nice day!Although the day is pass【已经结束要用现在完成时has passed】,it will always be missed by me!【这句话没必要用被动,改 I will always remember it】
第一行，best----most
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　　My experiences on New Year's Day
New Year is the 【most】 important thing for Chinese.
【去掉on】This New Year's
Day,I went to my hometown and visit my grandparents. My grandparents live in ...
best-most thing-day is-was makes-made go-went are-were eat-ate is-was always be调换位置（可以吗？）
visited，there are something，so we went back， they were delicious ，we ate them
best改为most visit改为visited makes改为made show改为tell唉，不想看了，，，
best 改成mostnew year's day指元旦. 春节用chinese new year's day你想说的是你回老家过年了. 如果你不是出生在老家,那么就不是hometown.可以说I went to visit my grandparents who lived in another...
My experiences on New Year's Day
New Year is the most important thing for Chinese.
On this New Year's
Day,I went to my hometown and visited my grandparents. My grandparents live in a ...请高手帮我修改下这篇英语作文,是否有语法和句式错误There are many kinds of transportation.For example,riding a bike,driving a car,walking and so on.For most of people,they prefer driving a car to riding a bike.They think driving_百度作业帮
请高手帮我修改下这篇英语作文,是否有语法和句式错误There are many kinds of transportation.For example,riding a bike,driving a car,walking and so on.For most of people,they prefer driving a car to riding a bike.They think driving
请高手帮我修改下这篇英语作文,是否有语法和句式错误There are many kinds of transportation.For example,riding a bike,driving a car,walking and so on.For most of people,they prefer driving a car to riding a bike.They think driving a car is more faster and comfortable than rading a bike.But I'd like to riding a bike.Though it's easy to feel tired,it can help us to keep fit.And it won't bring air polution.Do you agree with me?
1.most of people应该为most people 或者 most of the people2.more faster and comfortable 中faster已经是比较级了,所以不能加more而应该加much,comfortable是多音节词因此比较级加more是对的.因此应改为much faster and more comfortable3.would like to do所以应改为But I'd like to ride a bike.4.好像现在分词短语不能作句子（只有在生活英语或口语中才会用的）所以For example,riding a bike,driving a car,walking and so on.这个句子你可以改一下,加上谓语和（宾语)或者加上系表结构.